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I won't say the real name of the police department and all the names have been changed any similarities is accidental. I know some of the incidents in this story seem "far fetched", but no... most aren't! They actually happened.
Thank you for reading and any comments will be appreciated it!
Segments of this script have been developed in workshop in THE ACTORS GYM in Hollywood, CA, under the guidance of Bobby Moressco (Oscar Winner of CRASH), Gilles Chaisson (Producing Director of The Reprise Theater Co in Los Angeles) and the Membership.
Thank you for reading!!!!
--A screen play is something I've never seen on Deviant Art and it really shows how our website works and what were trying to provoke: To alter art from other art, to change art in a positive way while also having a contrast between pieces, and to depart from the most direct way.
--The screen play itself was very touching at some parts. It did have some slightly uninteresting parts but I think those are necessary to keep other parts interesting. At the end I was so surprised to how things turned out between "Father" and Son. When I started reading it I had the impression it was a short present story where as Tom took it to the next level. And yet to relate it all back to the fact that this was all real.
--I gave it a 4 on Vision because I did feel like there were parts in the text where either the point wasn't exactly made and the reader was kind of left hanging, or my personal vision was skewed of the activities of the characters (Which I do understand they did happen and they are not far fetched (As said in description). On the Originality I just had to give it a 5 because as previously stated it really proves deviousness. Technique was given a 5 for the same reason as Originality, and Originality was based off of the Technique. Impact I gave a 3, but that is due to my belief on controlling my life 100%.
--Now this is my first critique so please do tell me, on my page, how I did as i wish to do more. And don't be afraid to get critical, I would love to improve!
You have inspired me though sir, this should be a comedy version of Breaking Bad.
I have soooooo many more stories that aren't in this article... like the one about the where the grandaughter was drinking... that's not the true story... I'll have to tell you that one face to face... way more corrupt than written there.
We also had a cop who would work side jobs standing guard at a Burger King on Friday & Sat nights where juvies were dealing drugs and fighting... normally they'd go there in uniform with their gun and keep the peace... and one night he shows up with a ninja sword on his back and a red bandana across his head... while wearing his cop uniform.
or when one Sargent was banging the wife of a dispatcher and talking dirty thru emails and gossip when the I.T. Sgt discovers a file named "Donna's Panties" so the I.T. Sarge thinks it's porn, but opens it and the other Sarge and the dispatcher wife are talking about IT Sarge and that he might be the father of a kid with another cops daughter.... so I.T. Sgt calls the other cheat Sarge into his office, locks the door and proceeds to beat the crap out of the cheat Sgt... the entire Records Dept and Detective Burea is standing outside the office windows watching the beat down and trying to get the door unlocked for like a half an hour.
They just go on and on...
"It's totally legit... its done just for tax purposes. After that we can discuss Visa or Mastercard, but definitely not American Express, so don't even ask, alright? Any questions?"
"BETTER CALL SAUL!"
Another one is this guy whom I thought was my friend and co-worker, but he ended up stabbing me in the back and drove me to quit the job. My blood boils every time I even THINK of him.
It's almost as if Trust, Loyalty, Chivalry are all dead and buried.
I'm glad you're not calling me homophobic; not sure if you've seen it, but people on here tend to get REALLY touchy and pissy about that. >_>;
These things happened when I was younger and more naive, so.... yeah.
Me: Not fast enough... V